The end of POMPEII’S first page reads:
Already he could feel the heat of the morning beginning to build, the promise of another day without rain.
POMPEII is the first book I’ve read by Robert Harris, though I recently purchased IMPERIUM. As you might surmise, POMPEII deals with the infamous volcano that erupted in the year 79 AD. I like the above sentence because it sets a nice tone and foreshadows the volcanic eruption. Preceding it, the main character has just finished fixing an aqueduct two hours before dawn.
In honor of another Thesaurus Thursday, let’s see how else the excerpt might be stated. My effort:
A stifling heat already suffocated the dark fields ahead, signaling another hot, rainless day.
Anyone else want to try? Feel free to critique my sentence or the one Robert Harris wrote. It’s a good exercise I use to hone my writing skills.